Charlotte Warren
What affect does the
media have on women when considering male gaze in todays society?
Long sentences need full
stops and comers.
Need introduction.
Appropriate tone of voice
Good amount research, to
support work.
Balanced argument
Rosalind Stoughton
There is a current
sense of apathy and fatigue towards environment graphic design and the
sustainability agenda as a whole. To what degree is this accurate and it be
resolved.
Bad references- made
points with out backing them up- no evidence
Small paragraphs
Doesn’t flow very well-
not well structured or well argued
Martyn Woolley
The Role of the Graphic
Designer within the Music Industry
Sentence structure is poor
Could be worded better,
using a more formal tone of voice
Need to back up points
with evidence and explanation
Poor punctuation- capital
letters not where needed
